Walt Disney is famous around the world for creating beloved animated characters like Mickey Mouse and founding one of the most influential entertainment companies in history—The Walt Disney Studios.

Childhood and Education: He was born on December 5, 1901, in Chicago, Illinois, and raised in Missouri. From a young age, Disney showed a love for drawing and storytelling. He attended McKinley High School in Chicago, where he contributed cartoons to the school newspaper, and later studied art at the Chicago Art Institute.

Achievements Walt Disney was a visionary film-maker who revolutionized the animation industry. He created the first full-length animated feature film. Apart from films, he was also famous for building Disneyland—an entirely new kind of theme park that brought storytelling into real life.

Family He had four siblings and two daughters, Diane and Sharon, with his wife Lillian Bounds.

Walt Disney died on December 15, 1966, but his legacy continues. Today, The Walt Disney Company is a global leader in entertainment, inspiring generations through films, parks, and imagination.

1. Organization – 9.5/10

• Bố cục rõ ràng, có các mục Childhood and Education, Achievements, Family, Death & Legacy.
• Thứ tự hợp lý, dễ theo dõi.
• Nhược điểm nhỏ: tiêu đề Achievements và nội dung bên dưới hơi ngắn, có thể thêm thông tin cụ thể hơn (tên phim, số giải thưởng) để cân đối với các phần khác.

2. Legibility – 10/10

• Văn bản dễ đọc, phân đoạn hợp lý, tiêu đề rõ ràng.
• Hình thức sạch sẽ, không bị lộn xộn.

3. Ideas – 8/10

• Có thông tin chính: ngày sinh, tài năng, học vấn, thành tựu, gia đình, di sản.
• Tuy nhiên, nếu yêu cầu bám facts SGK, sẽ mất điểm vì:
• • SGK ghi Brenton Grammar School, không phải McKinley High School hay Chicago Art Institute.
  • SGK ghi “three older brothers and one younger sister” chứ không phải “four siblings” (cách nói 4 siblings chưa sai hoàn toàn nhưng không chính xác bằng).
  • SGK có tên cụ thể các phim (Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs, Donald Duck, Goofy) và số giải thưởng (26 Oscars, 3 Golden Globes, 1 Emmy), nhưng bài chưa nhắc.
  • Disneyland được mô tả là “the first of its kind” thay vì “an entirely new kind of theme park” trong SGK.

4. Word choice – 9/10

• Từ vựng khá đa dạng: beloved animated characters, visionary film-maker, revolutionized the animation industry.
• Có thể cải thiện:
• • building Disneyland → founding Disneyland hoặc establishing Disneyland (đúng bản chất hơn).
  • an entirely new kind of theme park → the first of its kind theme park để chính xác hơn với facts.

5. Grammar use – 9/10

• Ngữ pháp nhìn chung tốt.
• Lỗi nhỏ:
• 1. Trong phần Achievements, câu He created the first full-length animated feature film. nên bổ sung tên phim và dấu phẩy nếu thêm mệnh đề phụ (—Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs—).
  2. Diane and Sharon nên kèm thông tin one biological and one adopted nếu bám facts SGK.

Điểm tổng

• Organization: 9.5/10
• Legibility: 10/10
• Ideas: 8/10
• Word choice: 9/10
• Grammar use: 9/10
  Tổng = 45.5/50 → Thang 10: ~9.1/10
  (Nếu yêu cầu bám facts SGK: Ideas ~7/10 → tổng ~8.7/10)

Bản nâng cấp bám facts SGK

Walt Disney is famous around the world for creating beloved animated characters like Mickey Mouse and for founding one of the most influential entertainment companies in history—The Walt Disney Studios.

Childhood and Education
He was born in 1901 in Chicago, Illinois, USA. From an early age, he loved drawing and painting. He attended Brenton Grammar School but left at the age of 16 to follow his dream of becoming an artist.

Achievements
Walt Disney was a visionary film-maker who revolutionized the animation industry. He created beloved characters such as Mickey Mouse, Donald Duck, and Goofy. His first full-length animated feature, Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs, was a groundbreaking success. Over his career, he won 26 Oscars, 3 Golden Globe Awards, and 1 Emmy Award—a record in film history. Apart from making films, he founded Disneyland and later conceived Disney World, world-famous theme parks that attract millions of visitors every year.

Family
He had three older brothers and one younger sister. He married Lillian Bounds, and they had two daughters, one biological and one adopted.

Death and Legacy
Walt Disney died in 1966 at the age of 65 from cancer. Today, The Walt Disney Studios continues to produce world-class films and inspire generations to follow their dreams.