Question

[Bùi Thị Thanh Trúc]

Help me to check this essay.Does it have any mistake?(TOPIC: MY FAMILY)

Family is the most important thing in my life.
Firstly, family is where I was born and grew up, helped me to study many things and taught me good behaviors.
Secondly, all my family members are always by my side and encourage me every time I am failed.So I always have motivation to continue on my way.
Thirdly,every member in my home love me so much and so do I. In my freetime, I like to be together with my family.
Moreover, if I am tired or sad, I will have a great rest with my family and all my sorrow in my life will go far away.
In summary, I love my family so much and I will try harder to keep my family's happiness lasts forever.

Answer 1

[Đỗ Viết Ngọc Cường]

Firstly, family is where I was born and grew up, helped me to study many things and taught me good behaviors. ( thay is thành dấu phẩy )

Answer 2

[Bùi Thị Thanh Trúc]

Thank you!